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Post by Archaon 5100 on Mon Jan 19, 2009 10:38 am

the wind howled across the fields as the skys darkend with arrows and birds
the war had started a few months ago and now the final assault was ready
to be unleashed.

a bellow was given from the robed figure adn the legions of the gods
zamorak and bandos march forth in an unruly horde. hundreds of goblins
raced across the ground desperate to earn there gods favour, the goblins
were followed by packs of were wolfs raoring for flesh.

on the opposite side of the field the elvish and saradimist forces stood united
paladins of saradomin stood shoulder to shoulder with the elves and there
monsterous dire wolfs.

all of a sudden there was an unearthly roar as the greater demons leapt
through the immense portal there wings opened as they stretched.
after seeing the demons appear the legions of the dark minions charged
forward and struck the lines of there enemy as a smith strikes metal with
his hammer.

blood sprayed everywhere as the werewolfs attacked with tooth and claw
rending elves and men apart without a thought, goblins struck out with there
spears goring any who got to close.

the elves and men were not to be undone as there genral took to the field
her angelic form shone as bright as the sun as she swooped like a hawk
in the demons.

she struck left and right with her blade cutting down the demons with ease
and as the elves and men saw victory was near they raored praise to there
gods.

only then did they relise that the demons were only the first of the horrors
to appear from the portal as the skys darkend once again with not arrows
but with gargoyles.....
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Re: attempt at an aog story

Post by Eagle Eye307 on Mon Jan 19, 2009 2:07 pm

Nice story! If you use proper grammar I think it would be even better (cap first letter of sentence. use commas, etc).

I would rate it 8/10 how it is, and 9/10 with proper grammar. Very Happy


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Post by Archaon 5100 on Mon Jan 19, 2009 2:08 pm

tyvm ee Happy Lulz Big Tongue
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Post by Eagle Eye307 on Mon Jan 19, 2009 2:10 pm

archaon 5100 wrote:tyvm ee Happy Lulz Big Tongue

By the way, do you mind if I touch it up a bit and use it in my Total Chaos story? I would of course give credit where it is due. Wink


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Post by Archaon 5100 on Mon Jan 19, 2009 2:11 pm

eh how u make the copy right symbol using alt? lol!
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Post by Eagle Eye307 on Mon Jan 19, 2009 2:12 pm

archaon 5100 wrote:eh how u make the copy right symbol using alt? lol!

Upset I take that as a "no"?

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Post by Archaon 5100 on Mon Jan 19, 2009 2:13 pm

depends what u mean by tough up cause i want the bad guys to win Twisted Evil
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Post by Eagle Eye307 on Mon Jan 19, 2009 2:17 pm

archaon 5100 wrote:depends what u mean by tough up cause i want the bad guys to win Twisted Evil

Oh lol, I would make the elves get annihilated and the humans would take a beating and then triumph over the evil forces.... but the demons and werewolves would survive and haunt humanity for thousands of years until they escape their magical boundaries created by the ancient elven mages and attempt to slaughter humankind... Very Happy

I won't say if they succeed or not as that would give away the story. lol!

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Post by Archaon 5100 on Mon Jan 19, 2009 2:23 pm

hmmm ok but i wanna be teh evil gen lol
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Post by Desmond Miles on Mon Jan 19, 2009 2:23 pm

can i be a were wolf Twisted Evil
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Post by Eagle Eye307 on Mon Jan 19, 2009 2:24 pm

archaon 5100 wrote:hmmm ok but i wanna be teh evil gen lol

Okay. Lulz

Idk when I will get time to write it. Neutral

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Post by Archaon 5100 on Mon Jan 19, 2009 2:47 pm

ok's
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Post by Desmond Miles on Tue Apr 21, 2009 9:54 pm

i wanna be a werewolf!!!!!!!!!!!
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Re: attempt at an aog story

Post by doge on Fri Nov 27, 2009 12:40 am

That was like, awesome like a kickasserole man. :3 Smile
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Re: attempt at an aog story

Post by Wicked Joker on Fri Nov 27, 2009 12:44 am

wow...... this topic has been ded for a long time...
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Re: attempt at an aog story

Post by Archaon 5100 on Fri Nov 27, 2009 9:35 am

yeh so don't post on it then if anything i should be only one allowed to post on it
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Post by Wicked Joker on Fri Nov 27, 2009 11:14 am

why should you be able too again? i no you made it but its been ded for a while and eagle used it in his story (btw he needs to continue that when he gets back, it has been 8 months)
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Post by doge on Fri Nov 27, 2009 3:34 pm

Yeah, so what? You can scroll throughand look for something to post on that's new if your bored.
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Re: attempt at an aog story

Post by Archaon 5100 on Fri Nov 27, 2009 4:01 pm

i made this post so it's mine to spam


but yeh eagles dose need to make moer
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